Monday, December 22, 2008
Five similes which fail
With some books, even when I don’t remember the stories, unfortunate figures of speech in them stand out. A few of those are paraphrased or quoted here, and the first is from a Lord of the Rings fanfic.
1. Sauron’s fury had been building up inside him, like bread rising in an oven.
The second is from a romance where the hero and heroine kiss for the first time.
2. The corner of her mouth was as soft and tender as a child’s.
Ew. Another first kiss.
3. Their tongues touched like small creatures meeting for the first time.
That made me think of two naked mole rats stopping to rub whiskers in a tunnel underground. On to the later stages of lovemaking.
4.The folds of her sex blossomed like a wet lily. --> Link
A figure of speech this specific will make most readers imagine it too well, leading to a mental image of the heroine with a horticultural addition to her anatomy. Finally, for the fantasy fans…
5. The white mist rushed towards her like steam blown from the cheeks of an ice monster. --> Link
I have no idea why an ice monster would blow steam. Wouldn’t that cause the monster to melt?